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The diagram below compares the plan of a school in 1989 and 2010

The diagram below compares the plan of a school in 1989 and 2010 ngkE
The maps campare the plan of a school in 1980 to 2010. Overall, it is clearly seen that a number of changes were there such as an increase the size of play area. The principal changes were the addition new classroom, a library was replaced with a new classroom, a office was added and a car park, a driveway both were added. In detail, in 1980, a play area was located in the north side and in the left side of play area, there were two classroom and a hall. In the right side of play area there was a classroom, a library and a office. A play area and a office ‘s entrance door was located in the south side. In 2010, a number of changes were occurred in given time period. Firstly, size of play area was increased. In the left side of play area two new classroom was added and beside the classroom there was a hall. In the right side of play area the library was replaced with classroom and there were two classroom and an office. Besides the office there was new car park and a driveway. In towards the entrance was there was a kitchen and a library.
The maps
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the plan of a school in 1980 to 2010.
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clearly
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seen
that a number of
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changes
were there such as an increase the size of
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play
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area
. The principal
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changes
were the addition
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new
classroom, a library
was replaced
with a
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new
classroom,
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a
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office
was
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added
and a car park, a driveway both were
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added
. In detail, in 1980, a
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play
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area
was located
in the north side and in the
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left
side of
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play
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area
, there were two
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classroom
and a hall.
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of
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play
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area
there was a classroom, a library and
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a
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office
. A
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play
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area
and
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a
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office
‘s entrance door
was located
in the south side. In 2010, a number of
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changes
were occurred
in
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given
time period.
Firstly
, size of
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play
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was increased
. In the
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left
side of
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play
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area
two
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new
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classroom
was
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added
and beside the classroom there was a hall.
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In the right side
of
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play
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area
the library
was replaced
with classroom and there were two
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classroom
and an
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office
.
Besides
the
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office
there was
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new
car park and a driveway. In towards the entrance was there was a kitchen and a library.
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IELTS academic The diagram below compares the plan of a school in 1989 and 2010

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