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The crimes rate will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the history of mankind, possibly no century witnessed more progress in technology than the 21st century did. It is argued that the offender rate will decline due to the development of technology. As far as I am concerned, I partly agree with this idea. On the one hand, technology plays an important role in identifying culprits in criminal situations. There are many high-tech devices such as video cameras, face and fingerprint recognition machines. To put it in another way, this makes it easier to find offenders. To illustrate, video camera systems being all the rage are installed on almost all roads and avenues; therefore, if any criminal situations occur, looking for people who engage in criminal activities becomes more quickly and easily. On the other hand, although there is no denying the great benefit of technology in catching criminals, numerous reasons are showing the detection of crimes does not depend on technology. First of all, training police staff and service dogs were improved in terms of quality. It means that the professional qualifications of policemen have enough in finding crimes. Secondly, economic growth coincides with a higher quality of life, therefore people are aware of crimes and have certain knowledge to avoid problems related to delinquency. In other words, this makes a contribution to prevent a lot of crime. In conclusion, there are many reasons for the fall in the number of offenders. However, in my opinion, technology has great contributions in decreasing criminals percentages and helping police forces to complete their mission more quickly.
In the history of mankind,
possibly
no century witnessed more progress in
technology
than the 21st century did. It
is argued
that the offender rate will decline due to the development of
technology
. As far as I
am concerned
, I partly
agree
with this
idea
.

On the one hand,
technology
plays an
important
role in identifying culprits in
criminal
situations. There are
many
high-tech devices such as video cameras, face and fingerprint recognition machines. To put it in another way, this
makes
it easier to find offenders. To illustrate, video camera systems being all the rage
are installed
on almost all roads and avenues;
therefore
, if any
criminal
situations occur, looking for
people
who engage in
criminal
activities becomes more
quickly
and
easily
.

On the other hand
, although there is no denying the great benefit of
technology
in catching
criminals
, numerous reasons are showing the detection of crimes does not depend on
technology
.
First of all
, training police staff and service dogs were
improved
in terms of quality. It means that the professional qualifications of policemen have
enough
in finding crimes.
Secondly
, economic growth coincides with a higher quality of life,
therefore
people
are aware of crimes and have certain knowledge to avoid problems related to delinquency.
In other words
, this
makes
a contribution to
prevent
a lot of
crime.

In conclusion
, there are
many
reasons for the fall in the number of offenders.
However
, in my opinion,
technology
has great contributions in decreasing
criminals
percentages and helping police forces to complete their mission more
quickly
.
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