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Comparison of revenue earned in weekly sales.

Comparison of revenue earned in weekly sales. MBxJk

The table shows weekly sales in the month of October in a downtown business district restaurant serving both lunch and dinner. Total profit generated for different times had very different values to each other. From Monday to Friday, the revenue earned for lunch time showed little or no change until Saturday. The data clearly indicates that the figures declined on weekends with total money earned not crossing more than $2000. The dinner played a pivotal role in boosting up the sales. The total earning received each day was nearly more than the 50% of lunch for each corresponding day. Same in the case of former, numbers did went down on weekends for dinner. When we compare Sunday with other days of the week and lunch with dinner, we see that Sunday is merely the day where the least earning happened and dinner was preferred by customers than the lunch respectively.

The table This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 weekly sales in the month of October in a downtown business district restaurant serving both lunch and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeastbanquetsupper
dinner
. Total profit generated for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 times had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 values to each other.

From Monday to Friday, the revenue earned for This word is normally spelled as one.lunchtime
lunch time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 or no This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 until Saturday. The data clearly
 indicates that the figures declined on weekends with total money earned not crossing more than $2000. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeastbanquetsupper
dinner
 played a pivotal role in boosting up the sales. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
 total earning received each day was nearly
 more than the 50% of lunch for each corresponding day. Same in the case of former, numbers did The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: "go"go
went
 down on weekends for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeastbanquetsupper
dinner
. When we compare Sunday with other days of the week and lunch with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeastbanquetsupper
dinner
, we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that Sunday is merely
 the It is better to use 'day' with the time-relative pronoun 'when': "day when". (Alternatively, use 'in/on which')day when
day where
 the least earning happened and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeastbanquetsupper
dinner
was preferred
 by customers than the lunch respectively
. 