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The computer ownsership in population of different education levels

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The bar charts illustrated that the proportion of computer ownership according to five education levels from 2002 to 2010. There was an obvious uphill trend in the figure of computer ownership during the whole time. The figure claimed approximately 55% in 2002, then it increased by around 5% in every two years to 75% in 2010. In terms of various education level, there was a dramatic increase in the figure of those who did not finish high school from 15% in 2002 to 40% in 2010. Compared with these population, people graduated from high-school enjoyed almost 38% ownership in 2002 and 65% in 2010. Intriguingly, the figure of people acquired Bachelor’s degree and not was quite similar in 2010, even though the figure of former was 10% greater than the latter. The computer ownership of postgraduates ranked highest no matter what in 2002 (75%) or in 2010 (90%), which were more than two times as much as the corresponding figure of populations who were not finish high school. Overall, it’s clear that there was a advantages position in high education level population in terms of computer ownership.
The bar charts illustrated that the proportion of computer
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according to five education levels from 2002 to 2010.

There was an obvious uphill trend in the
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of computer
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ownership
during the whole time. The
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claimed approximately 55% in 2002, then it increased by around 5% in every two years to 75% in 2010. In terms of various education level, there was a dramatic increase in the
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of those who did not finish high school from 15% in 2002 to 40% in 2010. Compared with
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,
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graduated from high-school enjoyed almost 38%
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in 2002 and 65% in 2010.
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, the
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of
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people
acquired Bachelor’s degree and not was quite similar in 2010,
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of former was 10% greater than the latter. The computer
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of postgraduates ranked highest no matter what in 2002 (75%) or in 2010 (90%), which were more than two times as much as the corresponding
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of populations who were not
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high school.

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, it’s
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IELTS academic The computer ownsership in population of different education levels

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