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The city park changes after construction of a swimming pool

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The diagram below explains the differences before and after of construction of a swimming pool in the city park. As it can be seen in the diagram, some areas remain unchangeable while the others change more. Before the construction of the pool, there were two parking lots on both the right and left sides of the entrance. But after locating the pool in the city park, the parking lot on the right side was removed and the swimming pool was built in the same location. There were basketball courts behind the parking lot on the left side which one of which was changed to a parking lot after renovation. Also, there was a fountain on the bottom side of the garden behind the parking lot on the right side that now is removed and the garden was minimized in size. In comprising the before and after the changes were made in the city park we could see that parking area and basketball courts were decreased in order to build a big swimming pool.
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pool
in the city park. As it can be
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seen
in the diagram,
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areas remain unchangeable while the others
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change
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the construction of the
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, there were two
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parking
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lots
on both the right and
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left
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sides
of the entrance.
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But
after locating the
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pool
in the city park, the
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parking
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lot
on the right side
was removed
and the swimming
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pool
was built
in the same location. There were basketball courts behind the
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parking
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lot
on the
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left
side which one of which was
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changed
to a
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parking
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lot
after renovation.
Also
, there was a fountain on the bottom side of the garden behind the
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parking
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lot
on the right side that
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now
is removed
and the garden
was minimized
in size.

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and after the
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in the city park we could
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area and basketball courts
were decreased
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big
swimming
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pool
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IELTS academic The city park changes after construction of a swimming pool

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