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The charts show the share of the Australian and British cinema markets in 2001 and cinema admission in Britain and Australia from 1980 to 200.1

The bar graph shows the market of Australian and British cinema in 2001 and the line graphs compare the number of people visiting the cinema since 1980 to 2001. overall, Us movie are screened more than British and Australian movie. And UK people visit theater than Australian people. According to chart 1, More than 75% US movie were shown in Britain but only 20% was screening locally and almost 1% other movies. Whereas US film cover 65% of Australian theater and about 5% by British movie whereas only 10% screen had covered by local film. However, other film was able to occupy 15% in the year 2001. In the chart 2, it is shown that in 1980 about 100 million Britain people watched movie in theater and the trend drop rapidly to 58 million viewer in 1984 which is lowest viewer, afterward it slightly climb and rose steadily throughout the year and reached at 160 million viewer in 2000. similarly 40 million people was attending the cinema by the Australian people and it steadily increase and fall to 38 million in the year 1984 and with fluctuation it rise slightly and reached about half of Britain viewer in 2000.
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the market of Australian and British cinema in 2001 and the line graphs compare the number of
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people
visiting the cinema since 1980 to 2001.

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overall
, Us
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movie
are screened
more than British and Australian
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movie
. And UK
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people
visit theater than Australian
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people
.

According to chart 1, More than 75% US
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movie
were shown
in Britain
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but
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only
20% was screening
locally
and almost 1% other
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movies
. Whereas US film cover 65% of Australian theater and about 5% by British
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movie
whereas
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only
10% screen had covered by local film.
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, other film was able to occupy 15% in the year 2001.

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is shown
that in 1980 about 100
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Britain
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people
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watched
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movie
in theater and the trend drop
rapidly
to 58
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million
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viewer
in 1984 which is
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lowest
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viewer
, afterward it
slightly
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climb
and rose
steadily
throughout the year and reached at 160
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million
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viewer
in 2000.
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similarly
40
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million
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people
was attending the cinema by the Australian
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people and
it
steadily
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increase
and fall to 38
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million
in the year 1984 and with fluctuation it
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slightly
and reached about half of Britain
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viewer
in 2000.
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IELTS academic The charts show the share of the Australian and British cinema markets in 2001 and cinema admission in Britain and Australia from 1980 to 200. 1

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