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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compared and illustrate the tourism changes that were made in Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010. In Australia, the highest 53% of visitors from Europe and it dramatically decreased to 10% after five decades. whereas 10% of Asia tourists are improved to 63% in 2010. The 12% and 20% of USA and Britain were reduced to 7% and 20%. In Germany, the number of European and USA tourists was decreased to 5% and 4% respectively within fifty years. Britain tourist was declined to 6% from 20%. The USA tourist increased by 4% in 2010 In conclusion, overall the European tourist was more than 40% in past fifty years. Britain was the least number of tourists. The number of Asian tourists people was dramatically improved from 10% to 63% in Australia.
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in Australia and Germany from 1960 to 2010.

In Australia, the highest 53% of visitors from Europe and it
dramatically
decreased to 10% after five decades.
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whereas
10% of Asia
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tourists
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improved
to 63% in 2010. The 12% and 20%
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of USA
and Britain were
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reduced
to 7% and 20%.

In Germany, the number of European and USA
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tourists
was decreased
to 5% and 4%
respectively
within fifty years. Britain
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tourist
was declined
to 6% from 20%. The USA
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tourist
increased by 4% in 2010

In conclusion
,
overall
the European
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tourist
was more than 40% in past fifty years. Britain was the least number of
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tourists
. The number of Asian
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tourists
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people
was
dramatically
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improved
from 10% to 63% in Australia.
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IELTS academic The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

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