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The three pie charts depicts the percentagewise proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in daily meal of USA in: breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks.

The three pie charts depicts the percentagewise proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in daily meal of USA in: breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks. k2q8
The three pie charts depicts the percentagewise proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in daily meal of USA in: breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks. If it is over consume, will result as adverse effects on health. Overall, the highest percentage of sodium and saturated fat taken in dinner; however, maximum part of sugar added in snacks. To begin with the breakfast, contain 14% sodium, 16% saturated fat, and 16% sugar whereas it increases gradually in lunch by 29 %, 26% and 19% respectively. Furthermore, the substantial increase of sodium by 43% and saturated fat by 37% noticed in dinner, where the part of sugar is 23%. A through observation indicates that snacks contains great percentage of sugar by 42%, which is quite high, while 14% sodium and 21% saturated fat.
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in: breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks. If it is over consume, will result as adverse effects on health.

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taken in dinner;
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sugar
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with the breakfast, contain 14% sodium, 16%
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, and 16%
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sugar
whereas it increases
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in lunch by 29 %, 26% and 19%
respectively
.
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, the substantial increase of sodium by 43% and
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saturated
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fat
by 37% noticed in dinner, where the part of
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sugar
is 23%. A
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observation indicates that snacks contains great percentage of
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sugar
by 42%, which is quite high, while 14% sodium and 21%
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saturated
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fat
.
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IELTS academic The three pie charts depicts the percentagewise proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in daily meal of USA in: breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks.

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