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The charts provide information about students’ basic study reasons for various age groups as well as the number of support which they were given by employers.

The charts provide information about students’ basic study reasons for various age groups as well as the number of support which they were given by employers. Xqg1q
The charts provide information about students’ basic study reasons for various age groups as well as the number of support which they were given by employers. Overall, it can be seen that having career options is the main reason for young students to study, whereas adults choose to study basically because of interest. In the first graph, the figure for aged under 26 made up the bulk of career reasons to study with reaching the highest point of 80%. The percentage of 26-29 years who want to study for career and the number of over 49 years who want to study for interest are equally represented at 70%. Interestingly, the amount of 30-39 years old is the same for both options at 40%. Turning to the second graph, under 26 years old gain 60% support from employers including time off and help with fees. This support significantly decreases until 30-39 years old with reaching nearly two-third. However, two age groups namely 40-49, and over 49 that followed witnessed rise by 10%.
The charts provide information about students’ basic
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reasons for various age groups
as well
as the number of support which they were
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given
by employers.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that having career options is the main reason for young students to
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study
, whereas adults choose to
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study
basically
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because
of interest.

In the
first
graph, the figure for aged under 26 made up the bulk of career reasons to
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study
with reaching the highest point of 80%. The percentage of 26-29 years who want to
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study
for career and the number of over 49 years who want to
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study
for interest are
equally
represented at 70%.
Interestingly
, the amount of 30-39 years
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is the same for both options at 40%.

Turning to the second graph, under 26 years
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old
gain 60% support from employers including time off and
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help
with fees. This support
significantly
decreases until 30-39 years
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old
with reaching
nearly
two-third.
However
, two age groups
namely
40-49, and over 49 that followed witnessed rise by 10%.
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