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The charts gives information on a research of adult education and motivation for further study and the opinion on the funding of these education.

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The charts gives information on a research of adult education and motivation for further study and the opinion on the funding of these education. In overview large number of people perceive education due to their interest in the subject and for qualifications, Inclividual, Employer and Taxpayer should bear their cost for adult education in view of some people. The horizontal bar chart illustrates 40%. adult continue their education to their passion for subject. While 38% and 22% enrol in further education to enhance their qualification and job. However 20% study to get promoted in their job. Simillary ralio study as they derive pleasure in it. 12% of them indulge in studies to after their jobs. Only 9% study to get socialized and knowledge of other culture. Furthermore, 40% adult perceive education cost should be paid by individual, while 35% through the employers and on fourth opine it should by from the taxpayer.
The charts
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gives
information on
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "research".
a research
of adult
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education
and motivation for
further
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study
and the opinion on the funding of
Did you mean "this education" or "these educations"?
these education
.

In overview large number of
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people
perceive
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education
due to their interest in the subject and for qualifications,
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Inclividual
, Employer and Taxpayer should bear their cost for adult
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education
in view of
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

The horizontal bar chart illustrates 40%.
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adult
continue their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
to their passion for subject. While 38% and 22% enrol in
further
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
to enhance their qualification and job.
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However
20%
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study
to
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get
promoted in their job.
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Simillary
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ralio
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study
as they derive pleasure in it. 12% of them indulge in
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studies
to after their jobs.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
9%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
socialized and knowledge of other culture.

Furthermore
, 40% adult perceive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
cost should
be paid
by individual, while 35% through the employers and on fourth opine it should
Did you maybe mean "buy" or "be"?
by
from the taxpayer.
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IELTS academic The charts gives information on a research of adult education and motivation for further study and the opinion on the funding of these education.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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