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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. NrMEg
The two pie charts display the outcome of the questionnaire that was asked to the visitors about the customer service of the Parkway Hotel. In the years 2005 and 2010, a similar questionnaire was given to 100 customers. Beginning with the result in 2005, 45 percent of guests rated the customer service satisfactory. The major turning point to the review was only 5 out of 100 guests appreciated excellent customer service, in addition, 36 percent of customers rated poor and very poor. Meanwhile, in 2010, 67 percent of customers rated the hotel's customer service excellent and good. It can be seen that visitors are starting to like the customer service of the Parkway Hotel, the reason for it is only 4% and 12% of guests have a very poor and poor experience with the hotel's customer service. The main thing that can be observed here is that the customer service is greatly improved in 2010 compared to 2005.
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the visitors about the
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of the Parkway Hotel. In the years 2005 and 2010, a similar questionnaire was
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given
to 100 customers.

Beginning with the result in 2005, 45 percent of guests rated the
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customer
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service
satisfactory. The major turning point to the review was
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only
5 out of 100 guests appreciated excellent
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customer
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service
,
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, 36 percent of
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customers
rated poor and
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very
poor.

Meanwhile, in 2010, 67 percent of
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customers
rated the hotel's
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customer
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service
excellent and
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good
. It can be
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seen
that visitors are starting to like the
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customer
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service
of the Parkway Hotel, the reason for it is
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only
4% and 12% of guests have a
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very
poor and poor experience with the hotel's
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customer
service.

The main thing that can
be observed
here is that the
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customer
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service
is
greatly
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improved
in 2010 compared to 2005.

IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

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158 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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