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The charts below show the proportion of people spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 in 2008

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The pie diagrams below provide the illustration of European’s expenses on several commodities and services in a particular European country for 1958 and 2008. This essay will summarize the information that given on the pie charts as well as give an overall view from the data provided below. In 1958, people spent the most money on clothing which takes about 32% of the diagram. The second highest commodity expenses is on housing for 10% less than clothing industry. Up next, entertainment services comes third with 18% of their income spent on it. Not far from it, travel/transport services rank fourth which only have 5% fall behind entertainment industry. Last but not least, luxury goods and food commodities shows a neck and neck percentages with 8% for luxury items and 7% for food. Half a century later, in 2008, housing becomes the most spent commodity with 32% follow up by luxury goods and food with 17% each. Entertainment services maintained its position with 16% of people’s income. Clothing commodity drastically dropped from 32% to only 12%. Travel/transport services also dramatically fell for half of its percentage. Overall, housing, luxury goods and food commodities increased significantly while the other commodities substantially decreased.

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