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the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families. MM3Dq
The bar chart gives the magnitude of the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student various 1984 to 2009. From the graph that there are differences in the following years to different years. The capacity of 1984 was lower than that of 1989 (150000% and 250000%) respectively. The percent of 1994 lower than that of 1999 (20000% and 350000%) respectively. The scale of 2004 lower than that of 2009 (360000% and 400000%). The rate of 2009 was 400000%, which was the largest in 2004. The share of 1984 was the lowest at 150000 than that 2009. Overal, the percentage in 2009 reached a peak of 400, 000. It is very different from 1984 where this year only around 150000 and this year the financial condition of student families is the lowest of any other year.
The bar chart gives the magnitude of the number of university students in a particular country and how much the
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government
spent on each student various 1984 to 2009. From the graph that there are differences in the following years to
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different
years.

The capacity of 1984 was lower than that of 1989 (150000% and 250000%)
respectively
. The percent of 1994 lower than that of 1999 (20000% and 350000%)
respectively
.
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The
scale of 2004 lower than that of 2009 (360000% and 400000%).
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The
rate of 2009 was 400000%, which was the largest in 2004.
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The
share of 1984 was the lowest at 150000 than that 2009.

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Overal
, the percentage in 2009 reached a peak of 400, 000. It is
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very
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different
from 1984 where this
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year
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only
around 150000 and this
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year
the financial condition of student families is the lowest of any other
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year
.
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IELTS academic the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families.

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