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The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008.

The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008. b8NX
The charts represent budgetary spending samples in two provinces among 1980 as well as 2008. Overall, in 1980 the 29 percent of average household budget went on food and drink in New-Zealand. While, the equivalent figure for UK was 23%. On the other hand, in 2008 expenditure on food and drink has fallen by 4% in New-Zealand as well as 10 percent decreased in UK. However, in both countries utility household consumption gradually increased from 21% to 37% in New-Zealand and in UK 26% To 28%. Secondly, if we talk about leisure activities proportion highly increased in UK 27% To 34% in both years. Indeed, in 2008 there are plenty of changes in proportion in both countries. Firstly, we can see in only 17 % budget usage in New-Zealand. By contrast there was a 34% in UK. In both countries transport costs as well as other costs hardly 15 to 10 household budgets respectively.
The charts represent budgetary spending samples in two provinces among 1980
as well
as 2008.

Overall
, in 1980 the 29 percent of average household budget went on food and drink in New-Zealand. While, the equivalent figure for UK was 23%.
On the other hand
, in 2008 expenditure on food and drink has fallen by 4% in New-Zealand
as well
as 10 percent decreased in UK.
However
, in both countries utility household consumption
gradually
increased from 21% to 37% in New-Zealand and in UK 26% To 28%.

Secondly
, if we talk about leisure activities proportion
highly
increased in UK 27% To 34% in both years.
Indeed
, in 2008 there are
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in proportion in both countries.
Firstly
, we can
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17 % budget usage in New-Zealand. By contrast there was a 34% in UK. In both countries transport costs
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as well as
other costs hardly 15 to 10 household budgets
respectively
.
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