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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. oXRB
The line graph illustrated the percentages of joblessness people of rural and urban areas in Australia in the year 2012. . Which shows urban areas had less unemployment rate then rural areas. According to the ghrap, in the area of country side the percentage was more than 6 in first quarter of the year, and the ratio was higher compared to the city areas, where as the rate was around 2 percent in urban areas. Over the month of second quarte its gradually decreased to 4. 5% and it slightly increased to around 5% in third quarter it remained steady in the same ratio for rest of the months of the year in rural areas. In city areas, the second quarter of the year the percentages of unemployment rate was dramatically inclined which was almost double from first quarter, for next quarter period it was sharply declined to around 2% and for the rest of the months the trend of the ratio was upwards and the highest point was around 5%.
The line graph illustrated the percentages of joblessness
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people
of rural and urban
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areas
in Australia in the
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year
2012.
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.
Which
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shows
urban
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areas
had less unemployment rate
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then
rural areas.

According to the
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ghrap
, in the
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area
of country side the percentage was more than 6 in
first
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quarter
of the
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year
, and the ratio was higher compared to the city
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areas
,
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where as
the rate was
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around
2 percent in urban
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areas
. Over the month of second
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quarte
its
gradually
decreased to 4. 5% and it
slightly
increased to
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around
5% in third
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quarter
it remained steady in the same ratio for rest of the months of the
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year
in rural areas.

In city
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areas
, the second
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quarter
of the
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year
the percentages of unemployment rate was
dramatically
inclined which was almost double from
first
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quarter
, for
next
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quarter
period it was
sharply
declined to
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around
2% and for the rest of the months the trend of the ratio was upwards and the highest point was
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around
5%.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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