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The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who found employment within 6 month of graduation over seven subject areas in 1995 and 2005 in Molovia

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who found employment within 6 month of graduation over seven subject areas in 1995 and 2005 in Molovia 92Q0
The bar graph illustrated the proportion of those who had graduated, who found job within the first half year after graduating over seven majors in 1995 and one decade after. Overall, occupation declined over the period, growing only Computer Science and Science professions. Graduates who during half a year after graduate employment in 1995 were the most sought than 2005 years. Basically, professions of Computer Science, Business and Law close to 90% gain occupations in these seven fields of study. But in 2005 years there were fewer jobs available in most areas, except for the two professions. Among the graduates have become popular Computer Science and Science occupations who increased for 5%.
The bar graph illustrated the proportion of those
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after graduating over seven majors in 1995 and one decade after.
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after graduate employment in 1995 were the most sought than 2005 years.
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, Business and Law close to 90% gain occupations in these seven fields of study.

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increased for 5%.
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