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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. mgnL
The chart illustrates the percentage of jobless people in Australia (urban and rural areas) for each of the four quarters in the year 2012. Overall, significant differences in the percentage values can be observed from the starting of the year with some fluctuation throughout the whole period. In regards to the rural areas, there was a steady decline in the number of unemployment rate recorded which is from 6. 5% in the first quarter until 4. 5% in the middle of the second quarter. It then took a dramatic rise till the third quarter (5. 5%) before experiencing a small fluctuation for the rest of the year and stopped at 5%. On the other hand, the rate in the city has drastic rose around 2% in the first two quarters of the year. However, the trend seems to drop back to where it started in the third quarter. Near to the year-end, another similar increase has been noted, before same fluctuation took place. After that, the rate began to spike until the end of the year before it halted just below 5%.
The chart illustrates the percentage of jobless
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people
in Australia (urban and rural areas) for each of the four
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quarters
in the
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year
2012.

Overall
, significant differences in the percentage values can
be observed
from the starting of the
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year
with
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some
fluctuation throughout the whole period.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
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the rural areas, there was a steady decline in the number of unemployment rate recorded which is from 6. 5% in the
first
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quarter
until 4. 5% in the middle of the second
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quarter
. It then took a dramatic rise till the third
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quarter
(5. 5%)
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before
experiencing a
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small
fluctuation for the rest of the
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year
and
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stopped
at 5%.

On the other hand
, the rate in the city has drastic rose around 2% in the
first
two
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quarters
of the
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year
.
However
, the trend seems to drop back to where it
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started
in the third
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quarter
. Near to the year-
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end
, another similar increase has
been noted
,
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before
same fluctuation took place. After that, the rate began to spike until the
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end
of the
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year
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before
it halted
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just
below 5%.

IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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