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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The Pie chart draw the conclusion of reasons for usage of phones in African country in the period of 2016 and 2019. Overall, highest percentage of people in African country using their mobiles for Social networking sites like Facebook, WhatsApp and share chat. While phone calls between people has become less over the period of time. Firstly, utilization of social networks has taken the first position in survey continuously for 4 years with the percentage not less than 50%. Humans addicted to spend more time on playing the games and chat with others by using social networking sites. Whereas email has taken the second proportion in the diagram where no less than 20% for following years 2016, 2017, 2018 and 2019 respectively. They also occupy some time for sending mails on work, business and other purpose. People spending more time by taking pictures using digital camera of their phone. The usage of this is not less than 15% from the year 2016 to 2019. Lastly, People communicated less by using phone calls in the following years 2016, 2017 and 2018 with the portion of not more than 15%. While in the year 2019 it has come down to 5%
The Pie chart draw the conclusion of reasons for usage of
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phones
in African country in the period of 2016 and 2019.

Overall
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percentage of
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people
in African country using their mobiles for Social networking sites like Facebook, WhatsApp and share chat. While
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phone
calls between
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people
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has
become
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over the period of time.

Firstly
, utilization of social networks has taken the
first
position in survey
continuously
for 4 years with the percentage not
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less
than 50%. Humans addicted to spend more time on playing the games and chat with others by using social networking sites. Whereas email has taken the second proportion in the diagram where no
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less
than 20% for following years 2016, 2017, 2018 and 2019
respectively
. They
also
occupy
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some
time for sending mails on work, business and other purpose.

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People
spending more time by taking pictures using digital camera of their
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phone
. The usage of this is not
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less
than 15% from the
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year
2016 to 2019.
Lastly
,
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People
communicated
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less
by using
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phone
calls in the following years 2016, 2017 and 2018 with the portion of not more than 15%.
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in the
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year
2019 it has
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come
down to 5%
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IELTS academic The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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