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The chart shows the population of India, China, Japan, the UK in 2010 and 2020.

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The given line chart gives information about the population rate in India, China, Japan, the UK from 2010 to 2020. Units are measured by billions. Overall, it can be seen that the population of India displayed an upward trend, whereas this rate for China showed a downward trend throughout the time period. First of all, while approximately 3 billions of the population had been noticed in India by 2010, there was a significant rise to almost 11 billions in 2020. However, this figure for China had been accounted for 10 billions in the first year, but there was a drastic decrease to around 5 billions in the last year. Moreover, although the ratio for the UK had been noted to 2 billions in 2010, which slightly augmented by 2 billions in 2020. On the other hand, as this rate for Japan had been 4 billions in the last year, there was a dramatic decline to 1 billions in the last year.
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line chart gives information about the population rate in India, China, Japan, the UK from 2010 to 2020. Units
are measured
by billions.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the population of India displayed an upward trend, whereas this rate for China
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a downward trend throughout the time period.

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First of all
, while approximately 3
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of the population had
been noticed
in India by 2010, there was a significant rise to almost 11
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in 2020.
However
, this figure for China had
been accounted
for 10
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in the
first
year,
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there was a drastic decrease to around 5
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in the last year.

Moreover
, although the ratio for the UK had
been noted
to 2
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in 2010, which
slightly
augmented by 2
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in 2020.
On the other hand
, as this rate for Japan had been 4
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in the last year, there was a dramatic decline to 1
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