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The chart shows the percentage of adults and kind of electronic devices owned

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The chart illustrates the proportion of the grown-ups who own five different kinds of electronic equipment. Overall, it can be seen that cell phones are the most common gadget among adults. Cellular phones are owned by 83% of adults, and the figure is roughly ten times higher than the percentage of adults who use tablets, at only 8%, which is also the lowest figure in the chart. In terms of desktop, the proportion of the grown-ups who have this gadget ranks the second highest, at 57%; likewise, 56% of adults own laptops. Regarding MP3, this device is used less than laptops, at 44%.
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less than laptops, at 44%.
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