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The chart shows the average number of hours per person that adults and teenagers in one country spent per week on eight leisure activities in 2015

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The bar chart illustrates the time spent per person during their Free time by both the old and young on 8 different activities in 2015. Overall, the adults spend more time reading books watching TV and gardening, while the youth concentrate more on meeting friends and playing computer games. However, the two groups showed equal interest in going to the cinema and listening to music. The young adult spent 22 hours on meeting new friends which is the highest similar to 20hours of playing computer games whereas less than 1/5th of their time was put into doing sports while 1/2 of the day was dedicated to movie watching. However, the youth gave in the least of their time to reading books and gardening 2 and 1 hour respectively. I'm contrast, majority of the adults gave in 15hours into seeing movies while 8 hours of their time reading. Furthermore, the adult spent 7 hours playing computer games similar to the number listening to music as well as the youths and also same time spent by the senior citizen into gardening and partying. Finally, the elderly and young spent same time going to the cinema while only 3 hours on exercise
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IELTS academic The chart shows the average number of hours per person that adults and teenagers in one country spent per week on eight leisure activities in 2015

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