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The chart shows the average monthly temperatures in three different African countries.

The chart shows the average monthly temperatures in three different African countries. MrpAe
The line graph illustrates the average monthly temperature in three different African countries namely Egypt, Kenya and South Africa. Overall, there has been a significant change in temperatures in all three countries. Egypt has a dramatic increase in the half of year, in contrast Kenya and South Africa decreased sharply in that time as the period shown. As can be seen, Kenya accounted for the highest temperature with 85F. The lowest is 55F in Cairo, Egypt. In July, there was a steep climb in Egypt that reached 83F, while South Africa decreased and just reached 55F. Kenya can see a small decrease in July with 75F while the highest just reached 80F. In December, Egypt fell dramatically by more than 55F, which shows that each six month that increased and decreased sharply. While Kenya and South Africa returned to average temperature like in January.
The line graph illustrates the average monthly
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in three
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African countries
namely
Egypt, Kenya and South Africa.

Overall
, there has been a significant
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change
in
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temperatures
in all three countries. Egypt has a dramatic increase in the half of year,
in contrast
Kenya and South Africa decreased
sharply
in that time as the period shown.

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, Kenya accounted for the highest
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temperature
with 85F. The lowest is 55F in Cairo, Egypt. In July, there was a steep climb in Egypt that reached 83F, while South Africa decreased and
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just
reached 55F. Kenya can
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see
a
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small
decrease in July with 75F while the highest
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reached 80F.

In December, Egypt fell
dramatically
by more than 55F, which
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shows
that each six month that increased and decreased
sharply
. While Kenya and South Africa returned to average
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temperature
like in January.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the average monthly temperatures in three different African countries.

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