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The bar chart gives data about the percentage of children participating in chosen spare time activities in Australia. Overall, it is evident to note that watching TV is the most popular activity for both sexes. In contrast, skateboarding, art and craft are occupying the bottom-most position for girls and boys in the survey, respectively. Research shows that the 100 percentage of boys and girls participating in watching TV. Regarding to electronic and computer games and bike, about 80% of boys participate, compared to just a little 60% of girls. Moving on to the art and craft, just below 60% for girls taking part which means the only activity that is taken a lead by girls, compared to only about 36 000 of boys. Lastly, boys participating in skateboarding twice as many as girls, 40 000 and 20 000, respectively.
The bar chart gives data about the percentage of children participating in chosen spare time activities in Australia.
Overall
, it is evident to note that watching TV is the most popular activity for both sexes.
In contrast
, skateboarding, art and craft are occupying the bottom-most position for
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girls
and
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in the survey,
respectively
. Research
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and
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participating in watching TV.
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electronic and computer games and bike, about 80% of
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boys
participate, compared to
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a
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60% of
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girls
. Moving on to the art and craft,
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just
below 60% for
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girls
taking part which means the
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activity that
is taken
a lead by
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girls
, compared to
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about 36 000 of
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.
Lastly
,
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participating in skateboarding twice as
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as
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, 40 000 and 20 000,
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.
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