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The chart shows how people accessed news using various media in one country

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The chart describes how people accessed news using various media in one country, such as Television, Newspapers, Radio, and Internet, for three different years, that is 2013, 2015, and 2017. Overall, television still became the favorite media for people to get news information besides it had a decreasing number in the last year. Internet had a great period and huge of increasing portion for servicing people to gain information. It could be seen from the bottom position in 2013 to the second favorite media. Internet had a sharply increasing progress. From the percentage number around 30% became approximately 68% in the end of 2017. In contrast with Internet, Newspapers had a bad period for four years. From the second favorite, about 42%, became the latest choice by the people in that city, with only approximately 22%. However, Television and Radio had a steady progress in the four years. Both of them had a decreasing number in 2013 with just a little bit down 80% and up 30% in favorite. After that period, they showed the steady progress until the latest years, but television still had an increasing number and kept remain the number one option media to people access the news. In summarize, there was a changed position of people's favorite choice media to accessing news from the first year to latest year. Newspapers and Internet had changed each other for the second place. Although they had a decreasing percentage, but Television and Newspapers still remained the first and the third option for the people in the city to gain the news.
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in one country, such as
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Television
,
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, Radio, and Internet, for three
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2013, 2015, and 2017.
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television
still
became the
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favorite
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media
for
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people
to
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get
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news
information
besides
it had a decreasing
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number
in the last
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year
. Internet had a great period and huge of increasing portion for servicing
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people
to gain information. It could be
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from the bottom position in 2013 to the second
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favorite
media.

Internet had a
sharply
increasing progress. From the percentage
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around 30% became approximately 68% in the
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end
of 2017.
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with Internet,
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Newspapers
had a
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period for four years. From the second
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, about 42%, became the latest choice by the
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in that city, with
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approximately 22%.

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,
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Television
and Radio had
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a steady progress
in the four years. Both of them had a decreasing
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in 2013 with
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. After that period, they
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showed
the steady progress until the latest years,
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still
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remain the
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one option
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access the news.

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position of
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choice
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to accessing
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from the
first
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year
to
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latest
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.
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and Internet had
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changed
each other for the second place. Although they had a decreasing percentage,
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Television
and
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still
remained the
first
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people
in the city to gain the
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news
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