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the chart show information on age of population in yemen and italy

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The pie chart makes comprasion between ages of people who live in Yemen and Italy in 2000 besides prediction for 2050 It can be easily seen from the chart that minority of population are over 60 people in Yemen and it is, also, predicted for 2050. On the other hand, there are common ages are medocres in italy and there is no change except growing the number of old people in italy in the future In 2000, 0-14 years children was half, minority of population with only 4% difference with 15-39 years. There is, according to the prediction, 15-39 years citezens will take 0-14 years group's stay becouse of seriously increase. While over 60 people peacking at only 5% in 2050 In Italy 15-39 years old people was over 60 percent, whole older people were about qauter of population. The figure for the 0-14 stood at 14%. It is predicted that, 0-14 will not face serious change. When, older and mediocre aged citizens will increase dramaticaly and gradual fall respectively
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