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The chart represents the proportion of donors among different age of people in Canada between years 2000 and 2015.

The chart represents the proportion of donors among different age of people in Canada between years 2000 and 2015. LGmgr
The chart represents the proportion of donors among different age of people in Canada between years 2000 and 2015. Overall, the donation rate of individuals increased over the past fifteen years. The percentage of charities between people in ages from 18 to 24 was 20 per cent in 2000, however it decreased considerably by 10% in 2015. Every one third person in 2000 between ages 25 to 34 gave charity, but in 2015 this level goes down. It shows the same results in mid age people. According to the chart, pensioners donor rate slightly rises from about 32 per cent in 2000 to just over 38 per cent. The number of charities between elders grew slowly by almost 8% compared with year 2000.
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in Canada between years 2000 and 2015.

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from 18 to 24 was 20 per cent in 2000,
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25 to 34 gave charity,
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in 2015 this level goes down. It
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the same results in mid
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over 38 per cent. The number of charities between elders grew
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by almost 8% compared with year 2000.
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IELTS academic The chart represents the proportion of donors among different age of people in Canada between years 2000 and 2015.

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