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The chart illustrates the average percentages of three different nutrients intake by states people in their normal meals and taking too much of it leads to unhealthy life style.

The chart illustrates the average percentages of three different nutrients intake by states people in their normal meals and taking too much of it leads to unhealthy life style. Looking at three pie charts, people takes more sodium follwed by Saturated fat and added suagr in their dinner. Based on the data provided, people take more nutrients during dinner time. First pie chat shows the percentage of Sodium, in that 43% are consumed in dinner, followed by lunch 29% and reamaining 28% are taken during snacks and breakfast times. Second chart shows Saturated fat, 37% taken during dinner, 26% during lunch, 21% during snacks and reamining 16% during breakfast. Last chart is about added sugar, 42% are from snakcs, 23% from dinner, 19% from lunch and reamaining 16% from breakfast.
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in their normal meals and taking too much of it leads to unhealthy
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life style
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Looking at three pie
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,
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and
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added
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in their
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take more nutrients during
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pie chat
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the percentage of Sodium, in that 43%
are consumed
in
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, followed by lunch 29% and
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reamaining
28%
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during snacks and breakfast times.

Second
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Saturated
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, 37% taken during
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, 26% during lunch, 21% during snacks and
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16% during breakfast.

Last
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is about
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sugar, 42% are from
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, 19% from lunch and
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16% from breakfast.

IELTS academic The chart illustrates the average percentages of three different nutrients intake by states people in their normal meals and taking too much of it leads to unhealthy life style.

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