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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

The diagram shows the considerable changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since from its construction in 1950. From 1950 to 1980, the houses are vanished, in that place a part of car park and science block had been replaced, whereas the farmland is completely converted into sports field. While school, main road and playground remain constant. From 1980 to 2010, the car park is extended to the previous farmland, whereas the sport field had taken a part into playground. While the science block, school and main road remain sustained. The overall trend is that their is considerable change in west park secondary school from 1950 to 2010 is that houses changed into part of car park and science block, whereas the farmland is totally transformed into car park, while the playground decline by constructing sport filed as a part in it.
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since from its construction in 1950.

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and science block had
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, main road and playground remain constant.

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into playground. While the science block,
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and main road remain sustained.

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from 1950 to 2010 is that
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and science block, whereas the farmland is
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

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