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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1970 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1970 and 2005. m78K
The bar chart shows the proportion of women entering university or college in UK, USA, Canada, Japan and Germany in 1970 and 2005. According to the graph, it can be seen that Japan had the lowest percentage of women who enrolled in higher education (20% in 1970; 40% in 2005) and the highest rate was in Canada in both two years 1970 and 2005 (60%-60%). In comparison the chart illustrates how the number of females going into higher education increased in each selected country in 1970 and 2005. In UK, the percentage rose considerably, from 35% in 1970 to 60 percent in 2005, as high as Canada. There was also a growth in four other countries, for example: Germany, its number of women was quite large. However, it just went up slightly within 35 years. About Canada, the country which had the highest percentage, its rate remained stably in 35 years period, In conclusion, it is easily apparent that women in Japan are not tendential to go to higher education while the number of those in some selected countries in Europe or North America was pretty significant.
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the proportion of
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entering university or college in UK, USA, Canada, Japan and Germany in 1970 and 2005. According to the graph, it can be
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seen
that Japan had the lowest percentage of
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women
who enrolled in higher education (20% in 1970; 40% in 2005) and the highest rate was in Canada in both two years 1970 and 2005 (60%-60%).

In
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comparison
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country
in 1970 and 2005. In UK, the percentage rose
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, from 35% in 1970 to 60 percent in 2005, as high as Canada. There was
also
a growth in four other
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,
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women
was quite large.
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went up
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within 35 years. About Canada, the
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which had the highest percentage, its rate remained
stably
in 35 years period,

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apparent that
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women
in Japan are not
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tendential
to go to higher education while the number of those in
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selected
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in Europe or North America was pretty significant.
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