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The chart compares monthly outcomes of various types of stores' types

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The chart compares monthly outcomes of various types of stores' types in the USA in the previous year. Three types of stores were studied (book stores, hobby stores, shoe stores). Outcomes were measured by millions of dolars. Generally, while shoes were the most dominated retail sales, books and hobbies were almost the same by significat differance from the first. Furthermore, although all sales falctuated from january till the last of the year, they have started to increase at end of the year. Finnally, books and shoes peacked significantly during jully and august. Between june and jully, while book and hobby sales were around 500 and 1000 millions of dollars respectivelly, it was many more higher for shoes by approximitally average more than 2500 millions. Both hobby and shoe sales peacked to above 1500 millions for the former and more than 2500 million for the later during third qurater of the year. Serprisenglly, all sales have sharply increased at end of the year as they reached around 1500, 3500 and 4000 milions for books, hobbies and shoes respectivelly.
The chart compares monthly outcomes of various types of stores' types in the USA in the previous
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year
. Three types of
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stores
were studied
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(book
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stores
,
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hobby
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stores
,
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shoe
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stores)
. Outcomes
were measured
by
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millions
of
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dolars
.

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, while
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shoes
were the most dominated retail
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sales
,
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books
and
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hobbies
were almost the same by
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significat
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sales
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falctuated
from
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january
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year
, they have
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started
to increase at
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end
of the
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year
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,
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books
and
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shoes
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peacked
significantly
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jully
and august.

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june
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jully
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book
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hobby
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sales
were around 500 and 1000
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millions
of dollars
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respectivelly
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shoes
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approximitally
average more than 2500
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millions
. Both
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hobby
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shoe
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sales
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peacked
to above 1500
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millions
for the former and more than 2500
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million
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later
during third
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qurater
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Serprisenglly
, all
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sales
have
sharply
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end
of the
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as they reached around 1500, 3500 and 4000
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milions
for
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books
,
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hobbies
and
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shoes
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respectivelly
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