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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. wBBQN
The pie chart below depicts the destination of Anthropology graduates from one particular university after completing their undergraduate degree and the table illustrates the salaries of Anthropologists after 5 years of work. Overall, it is evident that most of the graduates preferred to work full time and majority of earnings were in government sector. Firstly, by looking at the chart it is clear that more than half of graduates preferred to work full time. Whereas, only 5% of people decided to study to continue with post graduation along with part time which considered to be least among them. The figures for full time post graduate degree and unknown source accounted for 8%. Also, a decent number of people opted to work in part time (15%) while 12% of graduates were unemployed. On the other hand, it is lucid that private companies are the lowest in terms of their salaries. Almost 50% of their employees were earning below $75000. On contrary, both freelance consultants and Government sector were highest paid with almost 80% of their employee salaries ranging from $75000 to over 1, 00, 000 dollars.
The pie chart below depicts the destination of Anthropology
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from one particular university after completing their undergraduate degree and the table illustrates the salaries of Anthropologists after 5 years of work.

Overall
, it is evident that most of the
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graduates
preferred to work full
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time
and
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majority of
earnings were in
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government
sector.

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, by looking at the chart it is
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clear
that more than half of
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graduates
preferred to work full
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time
.
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only
5% of
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people
decided to study to continue with post graduation along with part
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time
which considered to be least among them. The figures for full
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time
post
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graduate
degree and unknown source accounted for 8%.
Also
, a decent number of
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people
opted to work in part
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time
(15%) while 12% of
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graduates
were unemployed
.

On the other hand
, it is lucid that private
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companies
are the lowest in terms of their salaries. Almost 50% of their employees were earning below $75000. On contrary, both freelance consultants and
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Government
sector were highest paid with almost 80% of their employee salaries ranging from $75000 to over 1, 00, 000 dollars.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

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185 words
6.0
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