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The chart below shows the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared. YM1n
The provided charts illustrate the various factors which influenced the adult to study and the course fees should be funded. Overall its clear that, most of the students were motivated to study due to their interest in subject and to gain qualifications. Interestingly noticed that individual who funded more contribution for each courses. A key takeaway from the bar chart is that, most of the adults shows interest in subject and to acquire degree which accounted for 40% and 38% respectively. 22% and 12% of adult who were decided to study mainly for helps their current job and to change the job. Furthermore, 20% of adult attracted to study for the promotion and enjoy learning and studing. Infact only 9% of them started to study for meet the people. Moreover, pie chart shows that how they funded fees for each courses. 40% of fees contributed individually. As regards employer which comprised of 35% but only quarter amount shared by taxpayer.
The provided charts illustrate the various factors which influenced the adult to
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study
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Overall
its
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that, most of the students
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study
due to their interest in subject and to gain qualifications.
Interestingly
noticed that individual who funded more contribution for each
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courses
. A key takeaway from the bar chart is that, most of the
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adults
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interest in subject and to acquire degree which accounted for 40% and 38%
respectively
. 22% and 12% of adult who
were decided
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helps
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study
for the promotion and enjoy learning and
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study
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shows
that how they funded fees for each
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courses
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. As regards employer
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which comprised of
35%
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

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5.5
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