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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks . Summarize the information by selecting the main features and make comparision where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. r7lL
This process shows how does the carbonated drinks are made. It is clear from the diagram that there is five main steps for the carbonated drinks to be done. According to what is shown that the progress start with the first step where is the point of cleaning the water then, with the second level while in this stage the heating evaporation and carbonation takes place, going on with phase three in this point the coloring, syrup and flavor are mixing together. Finally, with the last two stes four and five where in step four they filter and fill the bottles and cans so they are done to be packed. To sum up, we could say that the progress of carbonated drinks start with water cleaning and ends with the packnging and delivered to the supermarket.
This process
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shows
how does the carbonated drinks
are made
. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
from the diagram that there is five main steps for the carbonated drinks to
be done
.

According to what
is shown
that the progress
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start
with the
first
step where is the point of cleaning the water then, with the second level while in this stage the heating evaporation and carbonation takes place, going on with phase three in this point the coloring, syrup and flavor are mixing together.
Finally
, with the last two
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stes
four and five where in step four they filter and fill the bottles and cans
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so
they
are done
to
be packed
.

To sum up, we could say that the progress of carbonated drinks
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start
with water cleaning and ends with the
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packnging
and delivered to the supermarket.

IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
136 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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