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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. 9dgx
The bar chart demonstrates families percent in owning and renting residence in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. Overall rented residence considerably residence considerably fell. On the other hand house owners gradually grown. The rented houses was more than 70 percent in 1918 and it decreased to 30 percent in 2001. But it slightly increased around 35 percent in 2011. While the percentages of rented residence was at a same percent around 70 in 1939. The numbers of households owning the house was just around 20 percent in 1918 then gradually increased and peaked in 2001 around 70 percent. Also in 1939 and 1953 the number of families in owned residence was same with approximately 30 percent. Besides the figures of both group was exactly the same in 1971 with 50 percent.
The bar chart demonstrates families
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in owning and renting
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residence
in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
rented
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considerably
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residence
considerably
fell.
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owners
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The rented
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houses
was more than 70
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in 1918 and it decreased to 30
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percent
in 2001.
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it
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around
35
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percent
in 2011.
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While
the percentages of rented
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residence
was at a same
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around
70 in 1939.

The numbers of households owning the
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house
was
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just
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around
20
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in 1918 then
gradually
increased and peaked in 2001
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around
70
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percent
.
Also
in 1939 and 1953 the number of families in
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owned
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residence
was same with approximately 30 percent.

Besides
the figures of both group was exactly the same in 1971 with 50
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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