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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. WMO0
The bar graph describes the five methods of transport used by children to move to and from school between 10 year period. Overall, it can be seen that walking was the highest used mode for transport in the beginning of the year and car passenger the least. While car passenger was used widely by children in the later years. Firstly, car passenger accounted for nearly about 5 millions of trips in1990, which increased more than two times (11 millions) in 2010 which became the highest mode of transport in 2000. In contrast, walking which was the most used methods of transport in 1900 by about 13 millions experienced a half decrease to reach 6millions in 2000. Similarly, bus which was the second highest used method decreased by 3millions (7 and 5millions) respectively. Also, cycling and walking and bus was the least used transportation during both years by (7millions and 5 millions in 1990 and showed a drop by 3million to reach 2million and 3million respectively.
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10 year
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that walking was the highest
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transport
in the beginning of the year and car passenger the least.
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used
widely
by children in the later years.

Firstly
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millions
of trips in1990, which increased more than two times (11
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in 2010 which became the highest mode of
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transport
in 2000.

In contrast
, walking which was the most
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used
methods of
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in 1900 by about 13
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millions
experienced a half decrease to reach
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6millions
in 2000.
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used
method decreased by
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3millions
(7 and
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respectively
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used
transportation during both years by
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7millions and 5
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in 1990 and
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a drop by
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3million
to reach
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2million
and
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3million
respectively
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

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