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The chart below shows the expenditure of 3 catagory among the difference ages group in uk residence in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure of 3 catagory among the difference ages group in uk residence in 2004. L9mwK
The chart gives information about the spending on food and drink, restaurant and hotel and entertainment by various ages groups of people in the UK in the year 2004. Overall, it is vividly manifested that the expenditure on food and drink was highly demand in all ages group. while, resturant and hotel was less likely to people except under 30. To begin, food and drink, higher age people was top on the list to spend money, it accounted for 23%. However, young individual were lowest intrested around slightly above 5%. Nevertheless, there had been continuous increasing percentage in entertainment between under 30 to 61-75 year. Moving towards, 61-75 Uk residents were less love to spend currency in restaurants and hotel around 1%, respectively. Moreover young to 60 year britisher were percentage of total spending in restaurant and hotel namely, 14%, 13%, 12%.
The chart gives information about the spending on food and drink, restaurant and
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and entertainment by various ages groups of
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in the UK in the year 2004.
Overall
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highly
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demand
in all ages group.
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while
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resturant
and
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was less likely to
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people
except under 30. To
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, food and drink, higher age
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people
was top on the list to spend money, it accounted for 23%.
However
, young individual were lowest
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intrested
around
slightly
above 5%.
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, there had been continuous increasing percentage in entertainment between under 30 to 61-75 year. Moving towards, 61-75
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Uk
residents were less
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love
to spend currency in restaurants and
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hotel
around 1%,
respectively
.
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young to 60 year
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britisher
were percentage of total spending in restaurant and
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namely
, 14%, 13%, 12%.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the expenditure of 3 catagory among the difference ages group in uk residence in 2004.

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