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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city center from 2002-2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The assigned line graph illustrates the information about 3 distinct criminal activities in Manchester city center from 2003-2012. Overall, burglary experienced downward trend whereas, car theft slightly showed an upward and robbery was constant throughout the time period. Firstly, in 2003, Burglary was almost 3400 and increased by 400 to 3700 in next year 2004. However, it was gradually plunged 2004 to 2008, and stopped at 1100. Burglary showed some fluctuations and 1400 at end of the period. Car theft in 2003, was 2300 raised by 50 in next year. Whilst, instantly decreased in 2004 to2006. Car theft felt some fluctuations and rocketed at the end of the period 2700 in 2012. Secondly, the case of robbers was at 550 in 2003 and rose in next 2 years 900 in 2005, in contrast, least at 300in next year. While, 2006 to 2012 robbery was quit similar.
The assigned line graph illustrates the information about 3 distinct criminal activities in Manchester city center from 2003-2012.

Overall
, burglary experienced downward trend whereas, car theft
slightly
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showed
an upward and robbery was constant throughout the time period.

Firstly
, in 2003, Burglary was almost 3400 and increased by 400 to 3700 in
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next
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year
2004.
However
, it was
gradually
plunged 2004 to 2008, and
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stopped
at 1100. Burglary
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showed
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some
fluctuations and 1400 at
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end
of the period. Car theft in 2003, was 2300 raised by 50 in
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next
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year
. Whilst,
instantly
decreased in 2004 to2006. Car theft felt
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some
fluctuations and rocketed at the
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end
of the period 2700 in 2012.

Secondly
, the case of robbers was at 550 in 2003 and rose in
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2 years 900 in 2005,
in contrast
, least at 300in
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next
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year
.
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While
, 2006 to 2012 robbery
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city center from 2002-2012.

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