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The chart below shows information on three different groups of leisure activities in a British town. The results show the percentage of people who attended each type of event and also their level of educational achievement. Summarise the information by selecting, reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information on three different groups of leisure activities in a British town. The results show the percentage of people who attended each type of event and also their level of educational achievement. 96dM7
The supplied chart gives data on the percentage of the population in a British town split into 3 groups by the level of education, which are participating at social events such as concerts, cinemas and sport activities. In general, the attendance rate at certain social events increased among secondary education until age 16, 18 and university-level education. In the arts category, the percentage of participation among secondary education until age 16 is barely at 40% while in the cinema category, it has shot up at 60%. In the sports category, the attendance rate among the population under 16 has dropped significantly at 25%. Among the population until the age of 18, in the arts category, the percentage of people taking part in such activities is at 58%, while in the cinema it has increased up to 63%. Sports has the lowest percentage among the under 18 population, declining at 43%. Amid the university-level education, the percentage of the population participating in the arts category is at 63%, whilst in the cinema category, it has reached a peak of 65%. The sports category has the lowest attendance rate amid university-level education, having a 42% rate.
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, which are participating at social
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events
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cinemas
and
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activities.

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rate
at certain social
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events
increased among secondary
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education
until age 16, 18 and university-level education.

In the
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arts
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category
, the
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percentage
of participation among secondary
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education
until age 16 is
barely
at 40% while in the
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cinema
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category
, it has shot up at 60%.
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sports
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category
, the attendance
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among the
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under 16 has dropped
significantly
at 25%.

Among the
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population
until the age of 18, in the
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arts
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category
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taking part in such activities is at 58%, while in the
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it has increased up to 63%.
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among the under 18
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population
, declining at 43%.

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participating in the
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arts
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category
is at 63%, whilst in the
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cinema
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category
, it has reached a peak of 65%. The
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sports
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category
has the lowest attendance
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rate
amid university-level
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education
, having a 42%
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rate
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IELTS academic The chart below shows information on three different groups of leisure activities in a British town. The results show the percentage of people who attended each type of event and also their level of educational achievement.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
194 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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