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collected points in four seasons

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The given bar chart illustrates how many points three teams collected in four different seasons. Overall, although team B showed some fluctuations in these seasons, it led to the other teams during this period. Turning to team A, it can be seen that they increased their points in the first two years until a sudden drop in 2005. On the other hand, team C showed some variations similarly to team B from 2002 to 2005. First of all, team B collected 82 points in 2002, then showed a downward trend in the next two years 2003-2004. They gathered 60 and 43 points in 2003 and 2004, respectively. In 2005, they acquired 55 points and won the consistent fourth championship. Team A's point had increased from 5 in 2002 to 11 by 2003, while team C also showed a similar trend and increased their points from 10 to 15 during this period. Team A exhibited its highest achievement in 2004 by 35 points, then they collected only 8 points in 2005. Team C could collect only 12 points in 2004 and displayed a gradual decrease in 2005 by 5 points.

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