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The chart below show the sales figures for children's toys in 2012 and 2016 in six different countries.

The chart below show the sales figures for children's toys in 2012 and 2016 in six different countries. gApBd
The bar chart illustrates how toys for children changed in sales in two selected years in several domestic markets. In general, this type of product increased in sales value in most of the countries where it was sold, especially UK and India where growth was the strongest of about 2 billion US dollars. From the aspect of size, UK and USA were the two largest markets among the six, exceeding the others by many folds. UK was undoubtedly the leading market for children’s toys, with sales record hitting $6 billion in 2012 before climbing up by 33% to $8 4 years later. Another major stronghold of toys for kids was the USA whose figures increased very slightly yet enough to secure the second place in value despite the fact that its sales were just half as valuable as UK’s. Customers in other countries were reported to spend less than some $1 billion on toys for children in 2012. The only fact that is worth noticing about this group of markets is the surge in expenditure on toys to $2 billion reported in 2016 in India who originally and technically generated almost no revenue out of the children’s toys industry 4 years ago.
The bar chart illustrates how
toys
for
children
changed
in
sales
in two selected years in several domestic markets.

In general
, this type of product increased in
sales
value in most of the countries where it
was sold
,
especially
UK and India where growth was the strongest of about 2
billion
US dollars. From the aspect of size, UK and USA were the two largest markets among the six, exceeding the others by
many
folds.

UK was
undoubtedly
the leading market for
children’s
toys
, with
sales
record hitting $6
billion
in 2012
before
climbing up by 33% to $8 4 years later. Another major stronghold of
toys
for kids was the USA whose figures increased
very
slightly
yet
enough
to secure the second place in value despite the fact that its
sales
were
just
half as valuable as UK’s. Customers in other countries
were reported
to spend less than
some
$1
billion
on
toys
for
children
in 2012. The
only
fact
that is
worth noticing about this group of markets is the surge in expenditure on
toys
to $2
billion
reported in 2016 in India who
originally
and
technically
generated almost no revenue out of the
children’s
toys
industry 4 years ago.
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IELTS academic The chart below show the sales figures for children's toys in 2012 and 2016 in six different countries.

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