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The chart below show the percentage of adults who use internet

The chart below show the percentage of adults who use internet K3R8M

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of adults of different age groups who used the internet everyday between 2003 to 2006 in the Great Britain. More than four-fifth of youngest people who were at 16 to 24 have used the internet between 2003 and 2006. In contrast, less than one-fifth of elderly people who had more than 65 years old have used the internet during the same time. There was a slight increase for using the internet among other two groups who were at the age of 25 to 54. Meanwhile the use of internet for people who were at the age of 55-64 climbed sharply from 2005 to 2006 and constituted 50% in 2006. All younger people who were under 24, have experienced the internet and the graph reached at 100% in 2005. Then, at next year the use of internet has came down slightly for this group and makes up approximately 90%.

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 the internet 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?every day
everyday
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between 2003 to 2006
 in the Great Britain.

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youngest
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used
 the internet between 2003 and 2006. In contrast
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who
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 were under 24, have experienced the internet and the graph reached at 100% in 2005. Then, at next
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