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the chart below gives information about the uk's ageing population in 1985

the chart below gives information about the uk's ageing population in 1985 8dadP
The graph shows how the size and distribution of the UK's ageing population is likely to change over a 50-year period. Overall, the proportions are predicted to increase in all UK countries. In 1985, 15 per cent of the UK population was over 65, but by 2035, this will account for 23 per cent of the total population. A closer look at the data reveals that the ageing population is expected to rise more in some parts of the UK than in other. In 1985, Wales had the highest percentage of people aged 65 and over, at 16 per cent. The second-largest group could be found in England and the third in Scotland. Northern Ireland had lowest proportion, with 12 per cent aged 65 and over. By 2035, Wales is still going to have by far the greatest percentage of over 65s, with figures likely to reach 26 per cent. However, the biggest increases in this age group, relative to the rest of the population, are predicted to occur in Northern Ireland and Scotland. In Northern Ireland, for example, this figure will increase almost double to 23 per cent.
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a 50-year period.

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by 2035, this will account for 23 per cent of the total population.

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parts of the UK than in other. In 1985, Wales had the highest percentage of
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people
aged 65 and
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, at 16 per cent. The second-largest group could
be found
in England and the third in Scotland. Northern Ireland had
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proportion, with 12 per cent aged 65 and over.

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still
going to have by far the greatest percentage of
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over
65s, with figures likely to reach 26 per cent.
However
, the biggest increases in this age group, relative to the rest of the
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population
,
are predicted
to occur in Northern Ireland and Scotland. In Northern Ireland,
for example
, this figure will increase almost double to 23 per cent.
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