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The bar chart illustrates and compares the number of players in the most common sports among boys and girls in New Zealand in 2002.

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The bar chart illustrates and compares the number of players in the most common sports among boys and girls in New Zealand in 2002. In total, it can be clearly seen that the number of males was more than females in six out of eight different types of sports and others that were not given. However, the highest figures for females were shown in three sports, namely, athletics, netball, and swimming. To commence with, boys that played cricket were 10 percent more. Similarly, the same can be said about the other 3 kinds of sports, which are martial arts, basketball, and tennis. It is interesting to note that the highest percentage was in soccer players among boys, it reached almost 25 %. However, the number of athletics girls was slightly more than boys. Also, the numerous number of females who do swimming were 25%, whilst males were approximately 12%. Regarding netball, in this kind of sport, there were more females than males, with approximately 23%, compared with 2%.
The bar chart illustrates and compares the
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and girls in New Zealand in 2002.

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females
were shown
in three
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,
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, athletics, netball, and swimming.

To commence with,
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boys
that played cricket were 10 percent more.
Similarly
, the same can
be said
about the other 3 kinds of
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sports
, which are martial arts, basketball, and tennis. It is interesting to note that the highest percentage was in soccer players among
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boys
, it reached almost 25 %.
However
, the
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of athletics girls was
slightly
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boys
.
Also
, the numerous
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females
who
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were 25%, whilst males were approximately 12%. Regarding netball, in this kind of
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, there were more
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females
than males, with approximately 23%, compared with 2%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates and compares the number of players in the most common sports among boys and girls in New Zealand in 2002.

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