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The chart below gives information about high school graduates in Mexico, Portugal, and Luxembourg between 2005 and 2011.

The chart below gives information about high school graduates in Mexico, Portugal, and Luxembourg between 2005 and 2011. gWoKD
The bar graph above shows that High school graduation rates from 2005 to 2011 in three countries. Overall, it is clear that the bar has trend except for Portugal’s. In addition, the gap between Mexico and Luxembourg has decreased. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the bar of Mexico has increased continuously, whereas that of Luxembrough has lowered for the periods. In case of Portugal, the graph became almost doubled in 2009 compared to the number in 2005, but it decreased after the year. Besides, the average high school graduation rates jumped up from approximately 50% in 2005 to approximately 66% in 2011. In sum, the bar trends of the nations indicate different shape. However the average High school graduation rate increased in the years. The chart indicates that the high school education has been more generalized and the educational gap between the region has been narrowed.
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graduation rates from 2005 to 2011 in three countries.

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that the bar has trend
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, the gap between Mexico and Luxembourg has decreased.

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that the bar of Mexico has increased
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has lowered for the periods. In case of Portugal, the graph became almost doubled in 2009 compared to the number in 2005,
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it decreased after the year.
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, the average
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graduation rates jumped up from approximately 50% in 2005 to approximately 66% in 2011.

In sum, the bar trends of the nations indicate
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different
shape.
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However
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graduation rate increased in the years. The chart indicates that the
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education has been more generalized and the educational gap between the region has
been narrowed
.
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