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The line graph given illustrates the amount of acid rain produced by different sectors in the UK from 1990 to 2007.

The line graph given illustrates the amount of acid rain produced by different sectors in the UK from 1990 to 2007. ORXG3
The line graph given illustrates the amount of acid rain produced by different sectors in the UK from 1990 to 2007. The units are measured in millions of tones. Generally, all categories witnessed a downward trend over the period shown. Furthermore, a dramatic decline was seen in the electricity, gas and water supply sector. In the early 1990, electricity, gas and water supply accounted for the lion's share among 4 groups, at 3. 3 million of tones. Following was the amount of acid rain emissions coming from other industries at 2. 1 millions. The transport and communication sector was responsible for around 0. 6 million of tones, roughly equivalent to that of domestic industry's. Between 1991 and 2007, there was a substaintal drop by 2 millions in electricity, gas and water supply while the amount of acid rain produced by domestic and other industries marginally decreased by approximately 0. 5 and 1 respectively. In the meantime, a minimal increase from 0. 6 to nearly 1 million was recorded in the transport and communication sector
The line graph
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illustrates the amount of acid rain produced by
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different
sectors in the UK from 1990 to 2007. The units
are measured
in
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millions
of tones.

Generally
, all categories witnessed a downward trend over the period shown.
Furthermore
, a dramatic decline was
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seen
in the electricity, gas and water supply sector.

In the early 1990, electricity, gas and water supply accounted for the lion's share among 4 groups, at 3. 3
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million
of tones. Following was the amount of acid rain emissions coming from other industries at 2. 1
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millions
. The transport and communication sector was responsible for around 0. 6
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million
of tones, roughly equivalent to that of domestic industry's.

Between 1991 and 2007, there was a
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substaintal
drop by 2
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millions
in electricity, gas and water supply while the amount of acid rain produced by domestic and other industries
marginally
decreased by approximately 0. 5 and 1
respectively
. In the meantime, a minimal increase from 0. 6 to
nearly
1
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million
was recorded
in the transport and communication sector
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IELTS academic The line graph given illustrates the amount of acid rain produced by different sectors in the UK from 1990 to 2007.

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