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The chart below give information on birth and death rate in swizerland in from 1970 to 2020

The chart below give information on birth and death rate in swizerland in from 1970 to 2020 700ky
The bar graph demonstrate the information about birth and death rates in Switzerland between 1979 and 2020. The data has been calibrated in Millions. Overall, it is clearly evident that birth rate increased throughout the period while death rate increased in initial period but decreased later. By cursory glance at a chart it is crystal clear that, in 1970 approximately 1. 2 million people were born while 1 million that death cases were recorded in same year. The birth rate in next 10 years remained almost same while death rate was increased up to 1. 3 million. In 1990 birth rate surpass the 1. 5 million and death rate was almost which was higher among years. In 2000, 2. 7 million people were born while nearly million people were died. In next 2 the cat birth rate reach to 3. 2 million which was higher among old here while that death rate touch the bottom.
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in Switzerland between 1979 and 2020. The data has
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increased throughout the period while death
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increased in initial period
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decreased later. By cursory glance at a chart it is crystal
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that, in 1970 approximately 1. 2
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that death cases
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was increased
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. In 1990
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surpass the 1. 5
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and death
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was almost which was higher among years. In 2000, 2. 7
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reach to 3. 2
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touch the bottom.
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IELTS academic The chart below give information on birth and death rate in swizerland in from 1970 to 2020

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