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The chart bellows shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed be men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart bellows shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed be men and women of different employment status. xoVQ
The chart depicts number of free time of people in hours per week depending on sex and employment status. It provides information about differences in leisure time between men and women in 1998-1999. Overall, unemployed and retired people experienced upward trend of free time, meanwhile there were less leisure time when people worked full-time job. But in all others type of employment men were leading the way of entertainment. Women mostly was enjoyed as unemployed and retired people, consequently it is evident from the bar chart that they had about 77 hours of rest per week. Furthermore, female who had only household chores had only 50 hours of leisure time per week. Contritely, women who was employed on full time or pert time job had 37 and 40 hours of recreation respectively. Men enjoyed their 84 leisure hours being unemployed or retired. Also, they had only a half of this free time working on full time jobs. Even though there were no male that was employed pert time or who took the place of housewife.
The chart depicts number of free
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people
in
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hours
per week depending on sex and employment status. It provides information about differences in
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leisure
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time
between
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men
and women in 1998-1999.

Overall
, unemployed and retired
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people
experienced upward trend of free
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time
, meanwhile there were less
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leisure
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time
when
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people
worked full-time job.
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But
in all others type of employment
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men
were leading the way of entertainment.

Women
mostly
was enjoyed
as unemployed and retired
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people
,
consequently
it is evident from the bar chart that they had about 77
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hours
of rest per week.
Furthermore
, female who had
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only
household chores had
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only
50
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hours
of
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leisure
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time
per week.
Contritely
, women who
was employed
on full
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time
or pert
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time
job had 37 and 40
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hours
of recreation
respectively
.

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Men
enjoyed their 84
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leisure
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hours
being unemployed
or retired.
Also
, they had
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only
a half of this free
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time
working on full
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time
jobs.
Even though
there were no male that
was employed
pert
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time
or who took the place of housewife.
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IELTS academic The chart bellows shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed be men and women of different employment status.

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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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