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The changing rates of crime in Panama city, 2010-2019

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The line graph illustrates the altering rates of crime in Panama city from 2010 to 2019.   The data varies among three categories of crime, namely burglary, car theft and robbery. The vertical axis depicts the quantity of incidents, while the horizontal one - years. Overall, as can be seen from the graph, the number of incidents in burglary took the leading position at first with a slight rise and with a sharp drop the following years. Car theft took the second leading position first years with a drop in the following years. Meanwhile, the crime in robbery took the bottom line with no significant change over the period shown. In 2010, the quantity of incidents in burglary was about 3500. The figures for car theft and robbery was lower, at about 3000 and 600 respectively. In 2015, the figures for burglary dropped sharply from about 3700 to 1000, whereas there was a slight drop in car theft and robbery, at about 2100 and 500 incidents  respectively. in 2019, it clear that, there was a slight rise in car theft and robbery, at about  2300 and 600 incidents respectively, while the number in burglary dropped to 1400 incidents.
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Panama city
from 2010 to 2019.
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The data varies among three categories of crime,
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burglary
,
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car
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theft
and
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robbery
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vertical axis depicts the quantity of
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incidents
, while the horizontal one
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years.

Overall
, as can be
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seen
from the graph, the number of
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incidents
in
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burglary
took the leading position at
first
with a slight rise and with a sharp drop the following years.
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Car
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theft
took the second leading position
first
years with a drop in the following years. Meanwhile, the crime in
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robbery
took the bottom line with no significant
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change
over the period shown.

In 2010, the quantity of
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incidents
in
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burglary
was about 3500. The figures for
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car
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theft
and
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robbery
was lower, at about 3000 and 600
respectively
. In 2015, the figures for
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burglary
dropped
sharply
from about 3700 to 1000, whereas there was a slight drop in
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car
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theft
and
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robbery
, at about 2100 and 500 incidents
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respectively
.
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in
2019, it
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that, there was a slight rise in
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, at about
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2300 and 600
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respectively
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burglary
dropped to 1400
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