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The below line diagram shows the number of visitors to various museum between the years 1980 to 2015.

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The below line diagram shows the number of visitors to various museum between the years 1980 to 2015. Considering the four museums, the Louvre is popular over the entire period leaving the London science museum and Shenzhen museum to least popularity. The Shenzhen museum fluctuated in between. The visitors for Louvre museum in 1980 is just below 8 millions and increased at considerable rate and reached between 9 million in 1995. After 1995, the visitors decreased and it continued for 5 years. After this the fame of this museum regained and stand top being visited by about 10 million when compared to other museum. The least visited is Shenzhen museum at just below the 4 million and it further decreased unto 3 million up to 2000. After the year 2000 rate of visitors were increased to some extent and it returned back to its own 1980 statistics. The visitors of rest two museums were fluctuated between the Louvre and Shenzhen. The Vatican museum is not so popular in the year 1980 visited by just a little over 4 million but it gained visitors at huge rate and in the year 2015 it came near the Louvre just a little below the 4 million visitors. The visitors of London science museum are flat from the year 1980 to 1985 but the fame decreased and followed the same path as Shenzhen museum up to 2000. After that, the visitors increased to some extent and in the year 2015 its visitors were just below the 4 million
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the number of
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between the years 1980 to 2015.

Considering the four
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, the Louvre is popular over the entire period leaving the London science
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and Shenzhen
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to
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popularity. The Shenzhen
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fluctuated in between.

The
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for Louvre
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museum
in 1980 is
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8
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and increased at considerable rate and reached between 9
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million
in 1995. After 1995, the
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visitors
decreased and it continued for 5 years. After this the fame of this
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regained and stand top
being visited
by about 10
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when compared to other
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. The least visited is Shenzhen
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at
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the 4
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and it
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up to 2000. After the
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2000 rate of
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were increased
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extent and it
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1980 statistics.

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of rest two
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were fluctuated
between the Louvre and Shenzhen. The Vatican
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is not
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popular in the
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1980 visited by
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over 4
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it gained
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at huge rate and in the
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2015 it came near the Louvre
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.
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The
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of London science
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museum
are flat from the
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year
1980 to 1985
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the fame decreased and followed the same path as Shenzhen
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museum
up to 2000. After that, the
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increased to
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2015 its
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IELTS academic The below line diagram shows the number of visitors to various museum between the years 1980 to 2015.

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