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The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Write at least 150 words.

The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. X7GnE
The given column graph depicts the number of individuals who visit movie theatres on a particular Europe country, in 2003, 2005 and 2007. As an overall trend, majority of them are visiting on weekends compared to weekdays. According to the pictorial, 10% of people have visited to the movie halls in 2003, but it had increased nearly to 14% in 2005; at the same day. Visiting for movies are completely gone down from 16 % to 19% on Wednesdays during the period of 2003 to 2007 Friday indicate similar things on whole three years and 30% of people totally 45% of people have visited the theatres on Saturdays in 2005 the highest number of disciplines of three years the graph and other is nearly 35% of arrivals for movies in the last days of the week in 2005 while 2003 shows the percentage of 30 in property however according to the provided information many people have their free time to watch movies in weekends more than weekdays.
The
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column graph depicts the number of individuals who visit
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movie
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theatres
on a particular Europe country, in 2003, 2005 and 2007. As an
overall
trend,
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majority of
them are visiting on weekends compared
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to
weekdays.

According to the pictorial, 10% of
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people
have visited to the
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movie
halls in 2003,
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but
it had increased
nearly
to 14% in 2005; at the same day. Visiting for
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movies
are completely gone down from 16 % to 19% on Wednesdays during the period of 2003 to 2007 Friday indicate similar things on whole three years and 30% of
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people
totally
45% of
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people
have visited the
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theatres
on Saturdays in 2005 the highest number of disciplines of three years the graph and other is
nearly
35% of arrivals for
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movies
in the last days of the week in 2005 while 2003
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shows
the percentage of 30 in property
however
according to the provided information
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many
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people
have their free time to
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watch
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movies
in weekends more than weekdays.
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